Wow! This is seriously heavy stuff. I am curious as to why the victim must die in your arms? It lends something very personal as to the identity of the victim. Perhaps someone the character is severely jealous of?

I really enjoyed reading this;
so full of emotion
and you can tell this either really happened to you (not you dying obviously but someone close) or that you were just in that state of mind
keep it up
5/5

I think this is a really good poem aznd I think that it could use a little improvement but I REALLY REALLY REALLY like it!

p.s. you need to get a picture of you on your profile.....hehe.

Nice poem....it's deep and I can tell it came from the heart

Very deep poem
loved it
5/5

~Bl0oDyAnGeLeYeZ~

It was very deep.!
i could feel the anger.
good job
5/5