Simply the best ,mesmerizing one
short and sweet!

Lol I love poems.. like these.. They take alot of thinking.. but when you come to what it is about. .ITs great.. Nice writing.

I wrote a sedoka too, from a poetry contest, but it wasnt as good as yours :p

Love it!
xx

Short but sweet

This is pretty good. I'm not much of a fan of this form of poetry. But it's not bad. Keep working!

I'm don't really like this form of poetry (the 'sedoka') but you did a really nice job with it. 5/5

Hey i love your poem, i'm not much of a poet myself but i think yours is really gr8... i would really like it if you could check mine out and tell me what you think.....

Keep On Writing...

Hey Nat that was awesome!!!
I've always been wondering how you do these thing of syllables and so..lol! I wish I cud do it sumday which will be impossible,lol =P
Great poem honey, very well written and beautifully worded ;)

Keep it up
Luv
NemO XxXxXxX

Natalie is a very good poem I don't understand why is rated so low, but is very good.

I loved it
keep it up : )

I loved it
keep it up : )

Beautiful! love the form poetry writes! great job!

You wrote a really to the point piece in such few words and very bound structure. Great job, you're a great poet.

This is great!! it is nice and short and to the point!!

~shanny~

Good job ..