This is an excellent poem, it's very detailted. when i read it i was able to picture your words in my mind. keep up the great work. Shanik B.

It had forced rhymes and was not exactly that great for being great with the flow. It wasn't that great. Of course there was this weird thing about it that had this story-like feel that was interesting. It did have intense imagery that was not truly the best that it could have been. I did like the story about it despite not really enjoying the way it did have this way that it was forced.
~Faith

Wow this is so deep..i lvoe the way ti builds hun, you are very talented please please do the wqorld a favor and keep writing.
I also love ur style i will read more later ok..please feel free to read my stuff...thnxs and love u.

Lissa xoxox

Loved it, Beautifully written. 5/5
keep it up

That was very good, extremely dark but you good at that, this was your best poem. 5/5

Hey vaney..
ur poems is fabulous!!!i loved it!i was almost crying!
keep up
see ya
bye

Gosh thats sad, but its an amazing poem...keep writing,ur good at it

Wow thats long but beautifully written keep writing 5-5