Oh this is beautiful..what if , what if , what if , thats all one could say ! I give it a 5 :P

I like this one a lot...dis one is really good!...5/5...keep up da gud work

Good one i like the usage of what if reminds me of a song well done here 5/5 keep on =)

I really love this poem. I know what situations like this feel like and what if everything that happens has a reason? Anyway the story of it is amazing. The emotion is powerful. Your voice is clear. Excellent piece.

Really loved this poem

Great write5/5

Thanks

5/5

Unique style to your poem and a true signature towards your writing.

This was an exceptional poem, loved the poem and the construction.

One suggestion towards Par: 2 line 4

"but you have already special one,"

I know this can be of you writing style but the wording can be changed a bit for a better read and flow towards the poem, as follow:

but you have found that special one

Just a suggestion, as then par 2 will read as this:

What if...
I realized to myself
that I'm falling for you
but you have found that special one,
can I just hide it for the benefits of our long lasting friendship?

But overall excellent writing and keep them coming.

Well done!
great expressíon of words! i like it!

THANkS!!!

What if;..... I love this.. What if this be my favourite poem of all time?

What if;..... I love this.. What if this be my favourite poem of all time?
lol.

Hi Chrismerl

destiny does exist, that is my believe, but you have to seek it and learn to control your own, that is the tricky part

loved this poem

"What if...
weacquainted in unexpected time
we get to know each other
and after long precious years
we became best of friends."
You used 'what if', the situation didn't happen and may not happen. So change 'get' to got and 'became' to become.

"What if...
I realized to myself that I'm falling for you
but, you have found that special one,
can I just hide the pain for the benefits of
our long lasting friendship?"
Remove 'to myself' it's unnecessary. When you say 'I realized' it's obvious you're referring to yourself. Otherwise, pertaining to this stanza, sometimes it's not worth sacrificing your friendship to a love more intimate, because it only destroys your friendship..

"My heart still hoping that you and me will
be someday"
hoping--hoped
me--I
perhaps add 'together' between be and someday..

"could I battle my own feeling to slept you
away
from my mind, baby?"
Err.. I really don't understand this part. My suggestion:
"Could I battle my own feelings to sleep away your memories.." I dunno what you mean here, so revise it..

"For all those years that you had gone,
I realized that I needed you most in my life,
not just a friend but a lover one..."
'had gone' --- 'were gone'
Remove 'one'

"What if the tears are falling again..."
Change to "what if the tears fall again?"

"My heart overwhelming for joy from those
old pain"
You're a masochist? lol.. revise this..

"What if...my greatest dream would be
granted,
can I blame myself thinking that destiny
really existed?"
Not a really powerful ending.. add 'for' between myself and thinking.. i think changing really to ever would be better..

That's all I can do to help you with this piece.. Some editing and revising would definitely make this better.

Not you're best piece. But keep writing.. I see potential

-X

Very good peom, i see you put ur heart and feelings into it, great job, as it has been told, there is someone for everyone, you will find that special someone, keep up the good work, ur friend, TDR

I am going through the same thing. If you want him you have to let him know.
This poem touched me because of my owm personal current experience and i can relate to it fully, but since you have also read my poems i think you realise that. Dont say what if, just do it and know.
Sun spots.

Not sure what you mean by- "slept" you away from my memories, probably sweep you away? Or something like that? Or maybe you did that on purpose? But anyhow, this one is really good, nice length, I like the whole idea of the poem too, really good.

Oh, I check it out..thnx for the suggestion..

You're too emotional in your poem . as i imagine while reading it. and really i don't know what words to use to praise your piece.! haha

...oh?! this is very realistic. i feel the love, i feel the pain. ^_^
nice poem... 5/5
keep it up!

Hmmmmm!!! Some poem u've got there. That's awesome, like wow!!!