Comments : A war story

  • 17 years ago

    by nikki

    Wow this is rly sad but then again i like sad poems so this was rly rly good 5/5 keep up the good work

  • 17 years ago

    by Lost & Delirious

    This is a great poem. I'm guessing that this is not your experience, and yet your descriptions are really good, I really imagined the whole story. I also liked the message: "What good has come from this?". So true!!!

    Great job!

    XoXo
    Gaby

  • 17 years ago

    by Hasan

    That's good piece of work right here,,,excellent story telling,,,u make the reader feel as if though you were there holding the gun.,,,,plus it has got a nice message to it,,,,,keep up the good work

  • 17 years ago

    by Joy

    This gave me CHILLS...very realistic.

    Flow was okay, work on maintaining a syllable count that's not both crazy long and crazy short in one stanza. (Here's a hint, read it out loud, and eliminate any words that sound out of place.)

    Great write.

    5/5

    joy*:.xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    I liked this. Speshly the ending.

    I REALLY liked the 3rd stanza. I thought it was great!! You've done an amazing job on this one! Keep it up!! 5/5

    `Taleee. xx.

  • 17 years ago

    by Green M&M

    Great job you are doing great.....keep up the good work....5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Samantha Hollywood

    Steph-- great!! This was really detailed which made it interesting and attention grabbing. I loved it. I also really liked some of your rhymes - they were complex, not so simple. It was great. =D
    5/5

    **Samantha Hollywood

  • 17 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    A very strong poem that gets your attention easily. great job.

  • 17 years ago

    by Nelle

    Well, this one made me cry..mainly b/c both of my cousins are gone fighting in this war, and it breaks my heart just thinking about what could happen to them..but i loved it you're emotions really came through, it flowed and rhymed very well..great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    I love it! The imagery in it is amazing and it seems so realistic-The flow is flawless. Great write----very unique----5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    This was a wonderful poem. It brought to life the tragedy of a war. You gave us the perspective of a soldier and what they go through. Eventually you turn around and the message is clear, war is stupid. Really good job on this poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by shobhana kumar

    Wow. you've portrayed what goes on in so many minds because of these hopesles wars.

    great writing

    peace
    shobhana

  • 17 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Wow! that was so sad, it was awesomely written, with deep emotions and great imagery, keep writing
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  • 17 years ago

    by Sole

    A great poem, that displyas the true feelings of the men at war and brings together, nicely, the bitter regret of war. Beautiful poetry.

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Wow.. i love this another really great one.. is it about the pointless war in iraq.. lol bush stinks.. .. that is unless you like him.. then ill have to downrate you.. lol JKJKJK

    but still really great poem!