Wow--that was a great poem. I could feel the emotions, some anger in it that you expressed really well. It is a strong poem-The only critique I have is that the flow was off on one line...The eye candy line...but maybe thats just me--Great write! 5/5 Keep it up!

Peice = piece

once again, work on the structure. this would be a great poem but its spoilt by the fact that u havnt set it out in a way that is appealing to read. please please pleeease, sort it out

-biscuit-