Interesting style and original which i love to see. Keep searching for the light of life! Good work

The pattern of the stanzas is interesting... how you rhyme every other line at first and then the (sort of) repeating last three lines. I don't know that I've seen that before. Very interesting, you do a good job with it.

Very nice poem- thanks for sharing it with us
I have a new poem now "Phone Booth"- i would really appreciate it if you could read/rate it :)

Awww... i dont think i read this one before. i loved it... but i love everything you write!!! you are fantastic my fair ravynness!!!!

luv ya.
Allanah
and ANOTHER 5/5 for you, my dear.

Hmmm............. you know im not good with words.
Genial, c'est beau. Aussi, c'est la vie...
Tehe tehe. You know i love your work and am at loss for words.

penible,
Nem

Astounding.... perhaps I may cry for this and you deary..... and we both know that pity is not my character

With Love
Nemiah

Nice poem.. i rily like it.. 5/5 :)

I love your poem.. its really good. keep up the good work

This is very nice dear and it has a great flow in it. I really liked reading it. The consecutive rhymes are superb. God bless you

5/5 for sure