Wow... great write. Loved the story, though it's really sad, but readers can appreciate the thought that went into it. Great flow and suspence. Loved it. Keep up the great work! 5/5

That was really moving. I'm rather critical on most poems, but I can't really find a fault.

It's was tragic, and I could truely feel emotion embedding in this piece. After reading again, I can see the flow is wonderful, nothing seems out of place. This really was a great poem.

Great work. x

Last line of the poem.. "were" of him, not was.

Very good poem. I can imagine this being my little brother and little sister if anything were to happen to one of them - they are exceptionally close. It hit home pretty well.

Thats so sad but amazing hun, It flowed so well and told a sad but beautiful story. Great piece 5/5

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That's really amazing- I love the phrasing. 5/5.

Wow this poem made me cry! such emotion and feelings!! i just loved it so much!
5/5
Luv FallenxFromxGrace