Wow, this one was great. I liked the rhymes. They reminded me of a band called The Ataris, they use to have cool rhymes like yours. Good stuff.

Well done, maybe i didnt get all this poem, but it seemed very well written, keep writing, you do have alot of talent

I kind of understand the poem, I see where your coming from, it reminds me a bit of a poem I once wrote. The again, I am 16 so it's probably the teenage point of view lol! Nice write.

Peace. [Sole]