I'm not familiar with the poetry form so I've followed your instructions to how it should be set out. I don't know if I've miss counted but line one and line eight don't seem to follow the syllable rule.
I thought you used decent vocab, portraying creative and vivid imagery. However, words such as "angel" "blood" "shadow" etc etc are very cliche and spoilt it slightly for me.
Thanks for sharing.

Absolutely Love it! Perfect ending!

The ending was different than what I expected it to be. And I loved that, I like predicting and ending and being totally wrong but still completely taken away by the ending that is actually there. Keep it up! 5/5 =]

-Jenna.