It was good, I just didn't really get the kite line, seemed more of a forced rhyme. But I liked the ending, it was good.

But the clouds fold back as the sun greats me.
[With that line, shouldn't it be "greets"? I dunno, I'm a bad speller so I'm probably wrong.]

Anywho, it was awesome, keep it up! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.