Very nicely done. I would change this stanza a little...so it flows better:

I Do What It Takes
To Make Me Better
There Will No Longer Be
Pieces Of Me That You Can Shredder

Read it out loud and then maybe do something like this:

I Will Do What It Takes
To give me a better life
There Will No Longer Be
Any part of me you can cause strife

Or some variation of that. I like to read my poems aloud before I share them with people....so I catch any issues with flow. Our mind will read into what we write, what we intended...the spoken word does not stand loyally by our side...Keep writing, you have talent and you write with your heart, which is what counts.

I like this, it's not a long poem but it's very well writtin... nice write! keep up the good work
with love
Jenny

Wow so much emotion.. well done :) 5/5

Nice, i dont know why babygirl would say its NOT long, i hate long poems, they make me sleepy.... anyway Nice Poem!

Very well written and i believe many ppl can relate to how you feel and what your trying to express in this poem

Lizzy