Love it! Amazing job---This is a really hard poem to name,,,I was trying to think of one but could't-I think the category you picked for it is good--I love the format of this piece-how each line is short, yet holds a degree of depth---Keep it up! 5/5

Very well-written. It was very rhythmical and the flow was very smooth and bouncy, it was fun to read, even though it was kind of sad. Lol yeah, I'm weird. I like your style. Keep writing! You have an amazing talent! Keep it up!! 5/5 for sure! :) My favorite stanza was:

"A laughing cry,
A gentle scream,
A truthful lie,
In lost dreams."

~BJ~

*cries* u always bash me. lol jk ur the only one whos honest. anyway, wow amazing. this is what im talkin about! gr8 details, gr8 vocab, paints a gr8 pic...wonderful. i have to go, so if u r/c me again ull have 2 wait a day or 2:D

I liked it... I dun much understand it, but I liked it. Keep um coming. 5/5

Ravyn

I liked it, i didnt really understand much of it, but it seemed to flow well and was a good read
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This is by far one of my favorite poems :) It was wonderfully crafted and modled! I love everything about it :)

Wow so simple but so virolent great job nice uses of words i like the way it is written great job 5/5

Gene Ross

It's simple. Maybe if you expanded there would be more to visualize of this poem though.

Amazing job, i like the oxymorons... they are so... well true, if u get what im saying

neways, great job and keep it up

Bri

You know that I'm really starting to admire you work right...LOL
I think this line was a little hard or didnt' add up for me:
In lost dreams.

It seems like something is missing there??

XDarkSuicidex --
Haha, alast, the last poem I`ve got to critique from you. =(. Lol. I think you did a really nice job on this, and you did in fact put it in the right category. After reading this, I spent a couple of minutes thinking of a title, but I just couldn`t find one. I don`t really like how you started most of your lines with 'A'. It makes it too predictible, and a little boring. But your words brightened it up ;; great job. 5/5
Thanks much for your comments.

Samantha Hollywood

W0W! Im, again, speechless. I like how you wrote this poem!

Devious feelings....i dunno i just thought thatd be a good title but it's ver good...

Ohh. Creative. It was short but really nicely done. It's unique and that's good cause there isn't anything I love more the Dark Unique and creative poems. Exellent Job.

I really loved this poem. I especially love your use of oxymorons in it.

A laughing cry,
A gentle scream,
A truthful lie

and so on...

I think this is great, and I'd love to help you with a title, but I have none.....one thing, the correct spelling is pleasant.