Sad... : ( I do really like the line "with nothing but the moonlight on." heh heh. i'm just going to mention some grammatical and punctuation stuff.

capitalize the "I's"
stanza 2 line 2 - it's spelled "sneaking"
st. 2 line 3 - i don't think you need that comma, but it's up to you
st. 4 - "nowhere" is one word
st. 5 - "too" instead of "to"
stanzas 9 & 10 - apostrophes in the words "couldn't" and "man's."

ok! i think that's it. that's just stuff that doesn't change the content of the poem, but it can effect how the poem is perceived or appreciated. as far as the actual poem goes, there's only one line i'd change. i think something like "lying next to me in bed" would flow better than "next to me lying in my bed." all in all, great job telling a story! i really liked the title as well

A nice poem, I enjoyed reading it, keep it up and 5/5 cause it deserve it.

"Holding me in your arms
& dancing in the street
You came out of nowhere
and swept me off my feet"

^ I lvoed reading that stanza... it's like my eyes just floated over a cloud. lol, if that makes sernse to you.

This poem was really sad, and what happened to you in this poem was sad but at the same time it was sweet how you didn't start writing at the end about crying and ploting about how to kill this man who took your 'innocence'. So even though it was sad, it was still very sweet.

Keep it up!

Take Care and God Bless,
Sarah-Joy

Very nice ending! A bit cheesy, lol, but I LOVED the ending. It brought everything together. And please type out the word 'and'! That bothers me!

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