Dunno what it is about, but it was sad and very good, keep writing
love Tara-Kay

Im not really sure about what your trying to get out but it was a really good one.. it was sad!! but great job!!
xoxox
kayla

Emmmmmmmmmmm
i think i got wut you mean
Do u mean what guy want out of a girl?
i think it is a nice poem, I really like it.
great job

Sounds like it's about a guy enjoying watching something - like watching a rape or pedophilia or something like that. *shrug*

It's well-written, though, a few typos you might want to fix.

Ooh I like this. I like the vagueness of to whom/what you are refering. I love the ominous quality of just being watched and used. I love the last stanza to.
Hell I just love it lol.

p.s. if I ask nicely will you tell me what it is about?

He'll tell you waht to do,
[Should be 'what']

I'm not quite sure what this was intended to be about, but that's what I like about it. It's mysterious and makes the reader really think about the poem. Another excellent job! 5/5

Natalie``

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Aww this sounds like me lol. I can relate loads. I hate it when they do that. Well...good flow, and good emotion, even though some people might be clueless about it >.< I thought the rhyming was chosen well. Keep up the writing. 5/5 =) xoxo

Samantha

"He'll tell you waht to do, "
[I think you meant 'what']

"He'll sit an dwitness,"
['witness']

"Finally he deminishes,"
['diminishes']

This was a really sad poem. More sad than dark. It was hard to tell who this was about, but it seems to me it's like a Father figure. Sounds like God or something. Hmm, well it was a great poem, I'll leave it at that.

There are a few grammatical errors in this poem you might want to fix, but besides that everything else is perfect! I like how this poems makes you think, a lot--I agree with Darien that it is more sad than dark, but it is a little dark and mysterious so I think it fits both categories---I think I know what this poem is about, but I'm not quite sure...I like how its mysterious and there arn't a lot of details [except for emotional detail-there is a lot of that] Amazing write!

5/5

So I am pretty possitive I know what it is about.However, I feel i have an unfair advantage.It is very sad but nicely written.You can feel the emotion.