Oh sweetie that is so sad.

I weighed myself this morning and I gained a pound
When I saw that number I fell straight to the ground
I couldn't breathe, I was in complete shock
I closed the door and turned the lock

These lines hit me real hard. Keep your chin up hon and follow the advice i the last lines

It might hurt and it might take some time
But I will stand tall, and up this hill I will climb

*hugs*

Very strong message and a well written poem, i like poems that are full of meaning adn this is one of them :)

-biscuit-

I listen to them, and follow there advice
[should be 'their']

Very sad poem. It's a pretty bad world these days, everyone's expected to look their best, and usually that still isn't good enough. I liked this one alot too. shows a great meaning behind it.. Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

This poem is sad not only because you have to go through that, but because it is so true to much of out nation. This poem really hits home! It doesn't really seem to flow or have a poetic rhythm, but it's the sheer content and truth that makes this piece stand out. Wonderful write!
~Dana

Omg. I love it. And I really think it is wrong how the Magzines and stuff, do that..Not everyone is skinny, not all of as can get to a size 0 or 2 or something..but fantsic poem. I love it.

I cant say nothing to this only great .. i prefer to rhyme and i like poems with a good flow of rhyme but you captured my attention with this great piece...

GeneRoss

Everything i want to say about that topic you have just said perfectly! WELL DONE! :) keep up the great writing x

This is quite heart touching. i feel sorry for people who feel they need to be thin to be like everyone else and it must be hard to go throught somethin like that.

i'm the oposite ive alwasy been fat. i would say im grossly fat now but im not like the preety girls in the mags im a 12 to 14.

i hope your ok and you'll get there in time.

so for now i wish you look for each and everyday.

i loved this and gave you 5/5

Great job, I hope you are eating now and worrying less about your weight.

Once again so so emotional but the truth is skinny is not exactly pretty you have to say a big FU** YOU to the things that say you must be that way. I have this AMAZING diet I'm on right now that I learn from my a singer at my youth group it you want I'll give you some more info on it....ever since then I haven't looked at food the same.

Nelle --
Hey love!! This was great, and technically, it does rhyme! It was a really great poem, I LOVED it! The flow was perfect, and so was the rhyming. It was great.

Very nice poem. ryming is not everything. Poetry is from the soul. I think you did well Loretta

In some ways this poem doesn't make sense but it does send a very important message not to believe in what magazines and tabloids say. The first stanza says so much, it tells us how we are 'supposed' to be and your feelings about it. I can relate to this I'm already skinny naturally but I get upset when I put on weight even though I need to. Keep writing. =]

Pip xxx