As a poem it was pretty okay, as more of a narrative, it got the point across. This poem was more of trying to get a point across, something I got as parents tend to ignore or downplay their children's problems at times. The child did it to themselves, so why help? Hope this isn't true.

Your love is something I can not bear
[I think you meant 'bare']

This poem was really sad, it nearly made me cry. I don't have a great relationship with my mother, and when she found out that I had depression and I was cutting, she wouldn't talk to me. I havn't seen her now for 2 years, and I havn't talked to her for a few months. So I can pretty much relate to this poem alot. I really really liked it. Keep it up!! And I hope you're alright. =) *hugs* 5/5

Natalie``

Yet another sad poem, the point you put across is heart wrenching! Yet another fabulous piece, based on content. Not the most poetic but poems with this subject don't need to be. Great write!

~Dana

Really good, emotional, really felt it. I enjoyed reading it. It kept my attention.

Very well wriiten imo i really liked it but i understand why you do these things to keep sane but you have to realize they wont gain you the attention you want apprently because you havn't got it yet ya know try something else something totaly diffrent from these ya know try something good something unexpected i really liked this poem =)

Wow. This is very deep and moving. I really feel your pain. It really is a kick in the teeth when your mom gives up on you (trust me I know)
As for the last line keep the poetry coming that will keep you sane.
Take care swetie *HUGS*

Was good it had so much emotion and so sad I'm sorry your going through such a rough time right now but please please suicide is NEVER the answer.

Nelle --
WOW. This held SO much detail and imagery - it was GREAT. I totally understood the intent, and it had my attention the entire time. You`ll always have MY attention. =D hehe, I crack myself up. But the flow and the rhyming throughout the entire poem was terrific - I like how you rhyme the 1st and 3rd lines, along with the 2nd and 4th. Adds a nice twist! Loved it! 5/5

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

That's a really sad poem and has heaps of emotion in it. You have heaps of talent. Keep writing.

Pip xxx

I can really relate to this poem!!!
*hugs*