Comments : Falling in Love Easily

  • 17 years ago

    by Bill Turner

    Nicely done.

  • 17 years ago

    by Simon Hayes

    Sad and tormenting piece. The flow was good, though I suggest you get rid of the "with's" in this bit:

    For he admitted he fell in love...
    **with you; your smile; your heart.**
    You never expected this sudden change;
    never thought of that crazy part.

    It just makes it flow a little nicer.

    Tragic, real and containing a great warning at the end. The heart is a frail possession that needs to be cared for.