Hey Tormented its me
Musicians Finest..if u didnt know
its my OLD account..lol
but thanx for the comment
and this poem...mmmm
Great..
Nice detail
nice message
ehhh
a little short, make it longer
so you can keep the reader reading and reading..some viewers might see tht its short and just go back because they wanna read something long and good
but from that
you did a great job
5/5
~MF~

Great poem! Short, but to the point. The flow is on target and I like the imagery in this piece---The only thing that I think if changed would improve the poem is this:

"On a dark lonely path,
Stars were there to shine the path"

The word "path" used in two consecutive lines doesn't sound right...In my opinion--

Overall, great write! 5/5

I like this poem. It's short, but to the point. Congrat's on the contest!!!

I liked this, and I really liked how you ended it. It was a great. One suggestion though.. With these lines:

On a dark lonely path,
Stars were there to shine the path

They both end with path, maybe try and change one. It's up to you though. =) Keep up the great work! 5/5

Natalie``

I really liked how these two stanza contrasted. One happy, one sad. That really made this poem strong. Great effect, great write.

This poem's so sad, and so well written. The beginning was my favorite part because I imagined everything you said, very sweet.

Good job!

XoXo
Gaby

Aww! Such a sad poem again! Short, and a bit of the flow was rocky, but other than that, it was good. Keep it up! =) xoxo 5/5

Samantha

Thats another sad poem! but well written you really got the talent :D

Amazing poem, i like how you made it simple which focused a lot of the readers attention on your emotions and pain! It was well written without a doubt! Loved it!

Mwah