I loved it nat im glad you have a bond with your sister :):):)

please comment on my poems i like to have feedback thanx xxx alex xxx

Beautiful poem Nat. It's great to see your bond with your sister is so strong. You are going to be a great aunt. Aunty Nat!! lol

I liked the first line of every stanza, they were strong, bold, powerful. Good job! SMAWCE

Wow---Beautifully written---The wording you chose is perfect and has so much emotion and depth. The flow is flawless, I love the "-" after some of the lines--This is a very unique kind of poem and I think you nailed it-Everything in it is perfect, absolutely amazing---I read it about three times because it's so breathtaking--Truly amazing write, hun--Keep it up!

5/5

Awwwwww.. taleee, that was so pretty.. and cute.. and sweet.. and all the other good words that can describe it! the imagery is beautiful, it flows well, and your choice of words is perfect.. i loved it! awww.. hehe.. definetely a heart-melter! 5/5

Beautiful. As a mother I think you captured the feeling of expecting a baby well.
I just really love this it is so warm and fuzzy ad the way you pause some of the lines is great.
Excellent job

This is great. Very inspirational. 5/5
-Kakashi

I like this style a lot better than your "very long lines"

It's a very calm and inspiring poem. Great job

THis poem is really cute you know and such a nice thing to write for your sister. I'd probably make two suggestions on the other site though

Very nice... I love the flow and how well you spoke of the topic. Excellent job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Great poem. I always love hearing about pregnancies (don't ask me why lol). I liked the flow, and I like that you had changed from a style for a poem or two. Congrats on the new baby! =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

What I don't like first,
I'm drawing a blank here. :)

What I do like,
Everything.
the form abab is flawless, the rhyming is incredible, and the message is preciosa.

The 3rd stanza told me the whole story.

Unwanted memories--
(problems that come packaged with a meaningful relationship. arguments, monetary hardships, etc.)

Blown through winds without a trace.
(all gone with the first sound of that cry, with the first sight of those little eyes)

Contagious summer breeze--
(Be happy is contagious when baby comes. Everytime you feel a hardship and the pressures of life, you look at baby and tell yourself, that its all worth it)
Caught a new smile upon her face.
(and you smile, and thank the Lord for this wonderful gift.)

Thank you for your poem. I don't have a baby yet, so I kissed my 9 year old sister, yeh, she pushed me away and called me a name. lol

Talee --
Wow, this was great! It`s really sweet that you wrote a poem for your sister ;; congrats on her being pregnant! I`m sure it`ll all work out for the best. =D Now back to your poem ;;
The rhyming and the flow, as usual, was perfect. I really like how you use the '--' things, it adds a nice twist. I like it. 5/5
Thanks so much for commenting on my new poem! It was much appreciated! And the poem was fictional, for the most part that is. But thanks for being there. =D

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

Good poem, very beautiful. the flow was good and well...5/5

Very beautifuly written The wording and use of words is fantastic, great flow, rhyme scheme was perfect. I hope you showed this to your sister, i think she'd like it. goodjob. =)

Good job

Great poem!

I think it's amazing. Very well written along with the others I have read so far, the wording in your poems is purely magical I say. ^-^

I really liked it, but is is quite different from the poems you usually write. It is good to broaden your skills with new styles, topics. Loretta

Its nice i like it very unique, feel free to comment on any of my poems, im new here...xx

This is a great poem. and congrats to ur older sis xx