Beautiful writing and so creative, great job. you got 5/5 from me

Loretta,
It is a very nice written poem. What I noticed tho is that your paragraphs are rhyming in three of them. However, the second one is not rhymed. It gets a little confusing to read it! BTW, I love you work!

Loretta --
I gave this poem a 4/5 for a couple of reasons. Mainly, the rhyming. You didn`t have a steady pattern throughout the poem, which really isn`t a good thing. Sometimes your stanzas rhymed, sometimes they didn`t. You definitely need to work on that. The flow wasn`t bad. You did a pretty good job on this, but there is definitely room for improvement. No need to comment on any of my work. I`ll go do another one of your poems.

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

Great job, amazing word choice... you made the poem relate to everyone

My, my, my...I know how this feels. You've created a poem that is so relatable, sadly.
My only critique is the word dieing should be dying.
Otherwise, well done. Keep it up~Holly

I'm totally understanding this one. Well done. xx