The first stanza is very very powerful. I caught on immediately. keep it up

AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!
sadly it's true. u got a gr8 rythm. u totally went strate to the fact. keep writing:)

I love this stanza, it's so meaningful and true. It made me feel sad, made me think about someone.

You're no everlasting man and no immortal soul,
But a human being.
You taught me to love, to hate, to live
And now I'm seeing
You die.

Great job! 5/5

Keep writing.

XoXo
Gaby