Comments : Friends

  • 18 years ago

    by SNOOKYME

    Hope the hurt lessens

  • 18 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    Great poem. i loved it .poems like this shouldnt be messed with because it comes from your own personal opinion so if someone else tells you what to do with it to make it better then its not your poem if you know what i mean

    would you comment on my poems please i like as much feedback as possible thnx xxx alex xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Good start, here's my critique:

    -You can work on the flow
    -Use "fill" words less such as "I", a, and etc.
    -Be more description, add imagery

    Ex:
    I'm looking out my pallid window,
    Gazing at flowers we once planted.