Wasn't to sure about the voab and that made it uneasy to read especially the repeatition. It felt sad to read really and personally I would change the words (boi-boy) but that could be me. Otherwise it was good.

Wicked good job i liked it...the vocab was fine cept i spell all my words correctly too but it wasn't hard to read. Nice work though

I love how you put the third stanza(paragraph)
it's amazing.
i enjoy reading your poems ;)
xxxx