Hmm...this poem didn't really...say much to me. It looked like a whole bunch of words crammed together in some places. Although it's probably just me, I DID like a few lines in it.

[Treasuring each other and their love
Her distraught heart was starting to crack
They shared one last kiss as he floated above
And their souls slowly faded to black..]

^^ My favourite stanza. It kind of said what I feel sometimes, but I just can't really descibe it very well. Great write. =) 4.3/5

Samantha

That was pretty lovely,i loved the contrasting parts of the song,and the rhyme is pretty well put too

wish you more of making nice poems like this ;)

Oh my god.. This reminds me so much of my current situation it gave me such chills.. Amazing job.. so sad.. -tears up-.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5