Comments : I dont need you

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    Aww.. this is kinda sad but really good.. nice job! keep it up

  • 17 years ago

    by Melissa S. Masucci

    "You wasnt there when..." wasn't should be WEREN'T.

    "...and now there here to stay" there should be THEY'RE

    The last line of the poem confuses me. After all the build-up why are you afraid you're fine? Is afraid the right word there?

    Also, I've noticed a trend of needing apostrophes in your contractions (I'm, I'll, etc.) in all of the poems I've read so far. It'd really add a lot to the poems to make sure you add them, unless there's a particular reason you keep them out?