This goes along with my poem 'One Last Moment'.. I had the same feeling when I wrote it.

I loved reading this. It said what it needed to say without being to long and although the sentences were longer they weren't drawn out.

I loved it. :)

*Jayde*

This is good.

This was a beautiful poem. I liked how you started it bright and cheery and slowly faded it to gray. However, the last two stanzas seemed to have broke from the flow . Great job though!!! Keep it up :)

This was a beautiful poem. I liked how you started it bright and cheery and slowly faded it to gray. However, the last two stanzas seemed to have broke from the flow . Great job though!!! Keep it up :)