Aww that was sad, I could really visualise what you were saying.. it doesn't matter that it doesn't rhyme, it was a good poem 5/5 xx

Honest comments?! Here's mine:

I hate the fact that my non rhyming poems don't come out as good as this!! This was so good. Kinda sad in a part. It made me think of a friend that died 2 months ago...and yeah... I actually understood this. haha...It usually takes me a few tries to actually enjoy a non-rhyming poem. Idunno where i'm going with this but oh well. I loved it...that's all I can say...lol Keep it up!!

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That is very sad, and I can definitely relate to this alot..it is very heartfelt..eh, so it doesn't rhyme..if it comes truly from the heart it is fabulous no matter what it is..i loved your word usage great job! 5/5

I thought this was good.. it had good descriptions and i agree that it came from the heart.. the emotion was loud and clear.. the flow was a little bit off.. some lines were longer and some were shorter than others and this threw it off a bit.. nice job on the title though, it really draws the reader in! great work, keep it up! 5/5

An excellent poem, I didn't even notice it was a non-rhyming poem.

Sarah-- Not all poems NEED to rhyme. I was actually GLAD this poem didn't rhyme. These days that's all I ever read. And It's nice to be able to read something that has no rhymes in it.

I thought your choice of wording was amazing by the way! And I loved the closing stanza. Very well done hun. Keep it up!! 5/5

Natalie``