I agree, the word choice is so important in such a short poem, and you did it extremely well

WoW. Great stuff, Holly. Glad to see you over your slump. Loved it.

OMG Holly....I first thought this was a poem for the picnic (Pleiades challenge).....until I kept reading and realized this was 'no picnic in the park'....lol

Cruelty fuels my madness
^^
amazing line Holly....

Reading your poetry has become an addiction Holly.....I just can't wait for more.

Amazing talent girl ! Amazing !

This is amazing, too Holly! I agree with Luanne "Cruelty fuels my madness" is an awesome line! Your talent absolutely amazes me, I never tire of reading your poetry!

Beautiful poem
Loved the format and the subject matter. Your the greatest Holly. always Loretta

Good choice of words
with verygood lines on it.
Excellent!
5/5

God Bless!

Your poems portray talent that most of us can not even dream of! how do u do it always, in any schemed write?

this one is truly out of the world!

peace
shobhana

Nice write!

Very well structured poem. Nice lines... Great to read!

Excellent poem, new to me , but I like it a lot, sad in form but very unique, great job , keep it up your friend Tracy dean 5/5

Great Poem!!

5.5**
<3

Lovely pleiades... n thankz 4 stumbling on ur profile accidentally n learnt d existence of yet another form of poetry.

Lovely .... keep it up... Wud like 2 thank u 4 sharing 199 wonderful poems n still thousands more thoughts that made other poets days here....

Best wishez for ur double century... n u deserve it in style..

Keep it up

Best wishes 4 ur 200th poem to come ....

Karan

Interesting form. I like your use of a metaphor and the word choice was good.