Really good poem ray. i loved the structure and repetition. awesome job...wut nite, was this anyway?
love ya lots,
sore

Oh my god...(I'm agnostic by the way ;) ) This is probably one of my favorite poems on this website. I tend to get along with emotional writers, and you definitely are one. this is so great...I'll pick out a favorite section of the poem....

That night I couldn't stop crying,
Was the night everything went wrong,
That night I couldn't stop sobbing,
Was the night my heart sang it's sad song.

That night I couldn't stop cutting,
Was the night you went away,
That night I couldn't stop bleeding,
Was the night I had nothing to say.

That night I couldn't stop screaming,
Was the night I lost myself,
That night I couldn't stop yelling,
Was the night I needed help.

That night I couldn't find myself,
Was the night I started crying,
That night I couldn't stop looking,
Was the night I started dying.

yeah, the entire poem. I'm adding this to my favorites if my gay browser lets me. Its beautiful...but also macabre. It's so depressing haha.

Just please Ray, dont' turn to that shit. I love your writing, and I love you as a friend, don't turn to that shit. Remember, stab a pillow when you get upset ;). It worked for me...but then cleaning up all the shreds pissed me off even more.

Buttt, that's beside the point. Again, excellent job on this, it really was great.

I liked how this was all set up, the title was perfect. everything seemed to fit into place

Hey another well written one you have talent don't let anyone tell you other wise and don't let idiots get to you they ain't worth it believe me i learned the hard way

Interesting, i like the way you have written this, the words you have chosen to use seems to bring your poem alive, seem to have given it breath, a reason for being.

good job!

october xx

Asome