Wow.... im speechless....

"the drownding victim sighs her sighs"
"the lovers embrace eroded away"
"Time the Instigator
Distance the Slayer
Hope the Destroyer
Love the Annihilator"

those are my favorite lines, I like some of the language and the word choice, the pausing that maybe I add or it's just there, like it,like it, like it

sorry but I can't think of anything that you could change, don't know what to say. But I like it and I'm sure your sick of hearing just that...

maybe I can think of something to add later?..... sorry haha

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aren't I a big help

Very creative and deep poem. Nice descriptions and use of vocab. The first stanza's flow was nice, but the last two lines of the second stanza changed. Keep it up!