Lol, that was quite funny.. Very creative as well.. 4/5

Oh god, how you come up with this idea,lol.
great job it was funny

Lol. i love nintendo. especially mario. really good work. loved it : D

Hahaha that was so funny... i even tried rapping it.. hahha well thx for making me laugh! keep writing!

~angel~

Okay. i didnt really like it...but you were very creative, by rhyming 'shoulder' with 'shoulder' *cough cough*...hmm..but good job. even though i didnt find it funny.....xD

I think this was really funny...great job, keep it up!
~Jules

Hahaha...
good one!
the poem was nice!
not rhyming at all...
but it was great keep it up!