I love the way you wrote this.. The way you started the third part and how you finish it with "go tell him"
Sounds almost a bit bitter and I love that!

This is great i love it and i would also like to thank u again on commenting on my toher poem and i will try to remember to fix the mistakes keyword remember lol well im gonna try to read more of ur work hopefuly so till then goodjob

keenan

Everyone was captured on a trapped of lies

and btw you describe your feelings again with those simple words the only this is the last Stanza Im just thinking what if you put it up with that refraint "it just was a lie" lols even though the repition was obviously seen it made the poem flow great

geneross

Loved the poem, true emotion shown throughout it. great great great write!

-Jessyka-

I LIKE THIS ONE