This is a great poem. 5/5 My only suggestion is to keep the rhyme pattern the same for all of the stanzas, because it makes it easier to read. I like how the last line is the title, though. This is awesome, for your first piece! Keep up the awesome work. Much love.

-*La Little Lor Lor*

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Great job I agree with the stanzas rhyming but I do that sometimes too but great job I loved it 5/5