Nice poem it has a good flow to it.but you have to realize everyone has to go at some point.even if they don't want to.keep up the good work you will get better at writting i know you will but you have to stick with it don't do what i did and just stop.all the best of luck
but just try and be your happy self it thats the thing she loves about you the most don't let her take you down with her sadness.
aunabeth