Hi i like u poem keep writing and please comment on mine

You is all that I need.
((You are all ...))
These times that I whipe your tears
((wipe))
For years I have gone without you, feeling inslaved.
((enslaved))

Not you're best love poem, but it was very good... I'm not sure what to say about it though, do forgive me.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Hey darl i like the sctructure of this poem. very well written. xx

I think it's very good and there's a lot of wonderful imagery in the words you have here. I just think the flow is a little disjointed, and mostly that can probably be put to a lack of any coherent pattern. All in all it's quite good, though :)

W!! u don't find ppl like u very often, u knew that?? how come u r tellin everyone that they r cool writers when u r an exelent one??? i admire u!! u r kinda like my idol!! great poems u got here, love it!!!!!!!!!! ~DaYiS~

The you in us doesn't need to be removed.
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OMG that line. WOW! i absolutely positively LOVED it. something about it idk what but something just touched me ALOT! this poem was very cute and sweet your emotions flowed out perfectly. it was beautifully written. great job!