THAT WAS A VERY AWESOME POEM! iT HAS A LOT OF MEMORiES FROM EATiNG TO LAUGHiNG AND MAKiNG NEW FRiENDS;; GREAT POEM!

_______HiS FRiEND*

That was really cute, too.

"The water was cold but the mood was just right
Basking beneath the suns light"

This bit here sounded a bit off, because there's a lot more syllables in the top line than the bottom. If you were to change the bottom line to:

"Basking beneath the sunshine's light" it would sound a bit better.

Overall: really good.

Another sweet write. I guess you need to be there to understand some of the references but it sounds like fun.

Aww it's cute. I liked the memories in this. It brought back some of my own.

The flow was ok, but could be fixed in a couple places. If you made some lines as long as others, it would work out more. Keep it up. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Very good...5/5

Emily i love your work and you already know that but i jsut cant stop reading this poem since i miss it too. i love you emily