This is almost there. you have a story a moral and you use punctuation and grammar very well.

I think there are one or two areas you can improve on in terms of flow. Write the poem out by hand then read it out loud twice. This should help identify the areas that feel a little clunky and fixing them will be easy.

Not bad at all.

Bret

Awesome poem ur a exellent writer

Oh wow that is so amazing..so creative ...wow I liked this one the best

Do u have any throw backs
u are to good
excellent poem great rhyming as well
keep up the good work