Nice poem!!! I liked it!!! but u rhymed the whole way through then quit at the end!! good job!! 5/5!!!

Good Job.. Keep writting :)

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

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I like the way that you rhymed in it and it flowed very well and everything, but for me the ending seemed a little abrupt and out of place. Maybe you could go on to explain how your girlfriend helped you and turn it into a love poem? Just a suggestion though, but keep on writing!!

I liked the way you conveyed your emotions. There were a few grammar errors, and the last line didn't quite fit into the poem. But, it was very good for your first poem. Keep on writing, i look forward to seeing you improve. 4/5 =)
-Jenna.xo

I liked your poem, especially:

no sleeping in the night or eating in the day.
But somehow it never seems to stay.

Looking forward to reading your next one!