Comments : The Slow Death

  • 19 years ago

    by Biscuit

    This has a very sombre tone, kind of appropriate, it sounds like a prayer. there are a couple of spelling mistakes:
    decent
    consciously

    and i think this line-
    'Thin and pale are we so that our eyes haven sunken in deeper and deeper into our skulls'
    should be -
    'Thin and pale are we so that our eyes have sunken deeper and deeper into our skulls'

    xx kim xx