This was very well written, and i liekd the message. Your talents work well with eachother. 5/5 =)
-Jenna xo

You got my 2 thumbs up or this write.

Very truthful yet provocative. The flow was undisturbed while the words were a great represtentation of the direction that our society has taken. The world is not the same place it once was...only a few short years ago.
This poem is not only a reflection of society but it is very thought provoking as well.
This was such a great write and I am very impressed. The 2 of you you write so nicely together as if your thoughts are all on the same page.
AWESOME COLLAB!!!!!! I was hooked right from the first stanza.

I cannot improve on Anna's comment, however, as a collaboration, it does rather prove the point that as a 'we', you two have written an incredibly thought provoking poem, with a deep meaning into society at it's peak. Very well done to both of you.. xx

Two fantastic respected poets...what more could I expect than a five star write...I can see the blend of Bill and Meenas talents in each stanza, its a strong piece with a powerful message...rather thought provoking as well. Great write guys!

Awesome job Bill and Meena. It was a great collaboration. I agree this world is heading downhill at an alarming rate.
Great job Loretta

Awesome collab with an outstanding message. It really couldn't be written any better... Excellent piece!

Your poem words complex thoughts and emotions which is wonderful to read. Thank you.