Awh, wow, hunny, that was soo sad.. The ideas, metaphors and amazing details in this were awesome! Although there were a few places that the rhyming and the line was very simple.. These places, I did not feel lived up to the rest of the poem.. Also, there were a few spelling, and grammer mistakes, and also things such as forgetting an "s" on the end of a word.. All in all though Nelle, this was an amazing poem! Wonderfully done! 5/5

This poem is relli good, Your a great writter, good job! 5/5

Aww that was such a sad poem and very well written and it rhymed good. 5/5

This poem was very sad but very well written it was a good flow but i kind of got loss on some words but very good i've read your poems beforeyour a good writer!!! keep up the good write

Hey thanks for commenting on my poem "hear my call" and i just wanted to tell you that im not going through that with my mom i just like to make up things.lol

Nelle great job! You know im going to be flying way above in heaven pretty soon i love you!

Outstanding piece of work, your poems have alot of relation to mine. Take care hope you get better

So sad poem it makes me cry hehe... well anyway you've done a good job and i was impress thanks for sharing god bless yah!

I dont usually like this type of poem about death and cutting etc. but this one really touched me because of the way it leads one into a false sense of being and plunges into another with vivid illusions Very well composed
(Is that a pun)
John

I like it, i can relate to it in a way xx

This poem is really good...keep on writting!! have fun in life..please comment and rate my poems..thanks~DARK~

Wow... you really have talent. I hope to learn from you
Jennifer

You have created a very good piece here. The sadness pours from your words. I have felt this kind of pain. The one that rips at your whole being. Excellent job! Very well written.

This one was very sad and touching. I almost cried I think most people can relate.