Comments : I Totally Give Up

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Very good emotions in this piece. Many poems with so many questions don't turn out being so good, but i really enjoyed this one. You vented your thoughts very good. Keep it up! 5/5 =D

  • Hey really sad, bt great poem, i hope its not you thinking of giving up on life, if u need 2 talk im here kk?
    love mel

  • 17 years ago

    by CourtneyLouxxx

    This is really, good, yet again so much emotion! i love it, thank u for the comment...im gonna add u to my faves xxx..bye

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashla

    Will I continue onto this journey?
    Will I survive the years?
    Will I become one?
    This is all I wonder,
    And these are questions I battle with.
    Will I be able to carry
    My tattered self,

    and

    Will all my mistakes
    Fall down like bombs
    For me to battle with?
    All alone?
    Face to face
    A thousand to one?
    Will my legs grow weak,
    My eyes be come tired,
    And my voice die in a horase?
    My tears will crust down my face,
    And my lips will begin to crack.

    Are great how you put worded it!

    I loved it. I love your writing!