Aw this is really good
i like your style of wrighting
keep it up

i like the last part my heart is free

take care xo

Wow it is verry goot, yah it is. yous got goot style, I LOVE IT!! haha, its a 5/5 for you mister
hehe, (i was speaking village style like when the old people try and speak english but say weird words cuz they ermm...only speak one language lol)
yeah anyways this is a wonderful work of art. 5/5

Great job. i love it. omg. im sending this to someone special.

I adore that ending...so beautifully written, moving and heartfelt.
I love the emotion and depth you put into this, and the imagery you portrayed made the whole piece very powerful and intense...beautiful work.

Luv it,amazing work