Oh, I love this story, well, poem, but it reminds me of a story.

You can tell how frustrated and sad the narrator is that s/he can't help there friend/lover/family.

I can completely relate to this. It's really hard when you can't help the only person you really care about.

Anyways, I love it. I hope to read more by you soon, and I love your pen name, too. Lol.

~Scarlett

Fantastic poem, such creativity from one so young is impressive!

I love this one. It's short, but has a lot of meaning. Don't stop writing. =]

Hey, wow, really powerfull poem, so many emotions in it!!! well done amazing poem, 5/5
Love Mel

Wow great poem! i loved the desciption and the emotion is soo strong and very clear! well done. dont stop writing coz ill keep on reading!! :)

sophie:)

ps. thanx soo much 4 the comment.i really appreciate it

I loved the last two lines, I thought those were really powerful and moving.
Yet another excellent piece.

I like it, like a downward spiral, you can not or could not predict this, but what if you could, I'm wondering if your writing this about yourself, some one you know or a fictional character.

P.s. The flow and rhyming scheme are awesome, this poem flows like a stream running downhill. Continuously.

This poem was great. i loved it because sadly it describes me. and it had soo much feeling behind it. great job lol. :)