Aww that's so sad, a very emotional piece.. It's a shame we don't have control over our hearts.. we could make life a lot easier.. excellent poem.. well done 5/5 xx

The is the best one gurl , you rock at this stuff. very well expressed. Love to read more. Cya
xoxoxo

Awwww...i loved it...keep u pthe good work!!

That was very good, but sad, really moving.

I must say, well done! when i read this poem my eyes filled with tears. I know exactly how you feel

WOW Awsome poem.
but its soo sad.
I hope things work out for you.
5/5

Aww. =( It's sad, but in a good way. I know how you feel. You sound like the girl that doesn't know exactly how to show her feelings towards others. Either that, or you just choose not to show your inner emotions. I am exactly like that. -_- Bleck. People are always wondering what I'm going to do next. And it's horrible. If you ever need to talk, I'm here. =)

Back to the poem, yes.

[Tears on the paper,as she reconstructs her world]

^^My favourite part. I liked the description of the tears running on the sheet of paper. It just seemed to give me more of a perspective. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

I know how you are feeling, i can relate to this alot.. i loved it well done, beautifully written. 5/5

~[AnotherDream]~

Very touching.You are a great writer!!

"Left alone in the dark, the walls closing in,
Evil, sad, anger crawling through my skin."

These lines has a lot of emotions.
A great write.
5/5

I can tell that David really hurt you. I can feel all the raw emotion as I read your poem. This is another excellent description of the heart-broken. 5/5
Keep up the excellent work.

Love
Letty

Another really great poem this is defanitly a 5/5!

Very emotional....sad write, but good job! Jpoet*

Awwh, a beautiful sad poem.. very emotional and touching.. a great write.. do comment mine too cus im new here..

love,
farha

The flow in this poem is much, much better. The first stanza is a very strong beginning and it's flow is perfect!

The second stanza has a slightly worse flow, but if removed a word or two from the last stanza it'd be better.

But, again, your meaning is represented strongly, so nice work!

So sad. No offense but for some reason he does not sound like a very good boyfriend to me. You're an excellent writer, keep it up!

Innoc3ntStar

Wow. Great poem.
Your a fantastic writer!
It sad though, doesnt sound like you boyfriend treats you very well.
Still. Keep ut the good work =)

This is really good, its exactly like me and my boyfriend..

Nice poem. Different, I liked it. 5/5

Very intresting and nicely written. hope you are fine. take care. i will must give you 5/5