Hope has fleeted... love depleated.
i liked that line...a suggestion is to put your poem in stanzas though so we can read it easier! Just a thought. Jpoet*

Thanks jpoet, but i preferr a disjointed form... it expresses my mood better!

A neat poem...I think you have great talent and so much potential...one suggestion is that I think your poems would have more impact on the reader if organized into more structured stanzas. but don't get me wrong! I love your stuff!
Charisma*