I think this is a really great idea for a book, and i think that you have started it exceptionally well. I don't think i could ever write a book, i'm not too sure, but i admire the fact that you have that talent. You could definately keep expanding on that. I don't think there is anything wrong with it, or any way you could improve it. But i don't write stories/books etc, so i suppose i wouldn't really know. But anyway, just thought i'd let you know that i think it's great, and i would read it if you finished it. =] Great work, Keep it up. 5/5

Interesting penned, though long but worth to read...i liked the way how you write them, absolutely beautiful...

have a great weekend, best wishes from west, bert ~

p/s: i'll add this story on my w/site and credit to you if i gtt your permission... but nevermine if you won't.

Wow. This was really long, but totally worth the time taking to read it. It was so beautifully written, and a great story line for a book of some sort. I really like all the descriptions, and the vocab chosen out. Keep it up. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

"Its love you can't tell someone how to operate it. It's not like a car, or a tractor. It does not come with an instruction manual, or owners guide. Nor does it come with a book called "The Proper Way to Love" sure maybe if there was such thing as proper and perfect love would be easy. No one would get broken hearts or make any mistakes. What would be the point then?"

^ haha gotta love it. Every word you have written here has made me think. Thank you for writing and sharing this, and I will forever keep this in my heart. Keep it up!

Take Care and God Bless,
Sarah-Joy

I love how you maintain the poetic values in the story rather than typical stanza form

4/5

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