Hey babe! Not bad! It's good! The only thing was the grammar typos. Everyone makes 'em, but I hate it when no one tells me!! Well, one was "Those times has changed". It was a bit difficult to read, but it may not have been a mistake at all. I know it SURELY seems like something I would do for either sound effect or imagery, but I'm a weirdo! Anyway, 4/5, and keep it up! STAY SHARP!
Love, PV

It was good. i really liked it a lot. but there was one line i didnt like at all

I put one foot forward feeling gay

it just doesnt fit right and i dont like the world "gay" i think it makes it sound weird in the poem. that might be just me, but i think you should change it. other than that its fine and its a really good poem 5/5

Hey sweetie pie! good work 4 a first back hey :) I hate it when u like ur poem but there are just some parts that r like crap... and others ur like whoo they're cool.. anywhoo. keep working on it girly. *hugs*

Ruthie xoxo

Wow you said it wasnt your best, i havent read any of your other work yet but i really enjoyed this :) great work
xx

I am glad it doesn't say gay anymore. I have a suggestion:

Those times "have" changed
The drawing "has changed" too
The pencil marks are fading
The world "just seems so" blue

I think it flows better with a couple tweaks. You don't have to of course, I just thought I'd suggest.