I really like this poem. The title is different, it's something that will make people want to read it. The flow and rhythm of the poem is very good and it held up well. You had some great word usage along with a very scary, but true message. Great job on this! 5/5

I loved it... I am honestly speechless. I have no idea what to say..It is (instert adjetive here) perfect. Wonderful job.

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

*Take no offence

^^Take it ouuuuuuuut. ;P

This poem was wonderful, Noni. I don't see how people could take offence to it. It's all the truth really. Flow, rhyming, was all great. Message in the poem was awesome!! Very strong! Keep it up hun! 5/5

Natalie``

Very good poem 5/5, nice words

I am speechless, true message and true emotions
here i want to write two lines from one of my poem,
We have hope for a better tommorow
even If today we live through pain...

great job once again....5/5

BTW, this poem should be the weekly contect winner

"Just like time, those young buds soon will grow
But not to more freedom but closer to enslavement
Swallowed deeper by clashing media; which truth
Each string of grunting strikes imprint; permanent."

Amazing lines Noni. I loved the entire poem honestly. I just thought that part stood out so much to me. I don't know what either. I liked it though. Nicely written.

This is a wonderful, beautiful, poem. You gave such a brilliant description that it left me in awww. I love the second stanza:

Hidden from poverty and the existence of death
While their small minds ponder on glorious dreams
Kept behind lines where only light can reach
Judging every hanging truth by what it seems

I really can relate to the message that you relayed in that stanza. I've met some people that explains their situation in different words, but that stanza and their words has the same meaning. Great Job 5/5

Letty

Well done Noni, I sort of knew what this disease was, but with this poem, it seems more clear now. I think I researched this about 4 years ago, and surprisingly I still remember it today. I'm guessing this had an affect on you, so you decided to write about it? Well done, you did a great job on this!

It was very deep. i liked it grrr8 job 5/5

This one deep noni,
this kinda an eye opener poem.
well written with a lot of value.
Good work.

Keep on writing on what you feel and like

God Bless!

5/5. I didnt understand what it was about but I ws awwed by the fact of how you could write!

Noni!! This was great!!! So sad but so damn true!! I loved the 2nd stanza the most....well i loved the entire thing but yeah...this was really good!! Keep it up!! Take care

[[ Poetess ]]

This is a wonderfully written poem with even a better message. It is unreal how delusional some societies can be. Throughout my life I've always hated politcs but it is only recently that I have discovered that anything and everything is linked to politics. To the qulity of air we breath to the general likes and dislikes of the general public. Thanks for posting this poem it has a lot of meaning.

Arsalan D.

Wow, Noni you are amazing.. You have such talent and you use it so well.. The flow in this is good except for a few lines and the descriptions leave me awe-struck.. You truly have a wonderful way with words, keep it up! 5/5

Brilliant!.....Strive on......

Wow.this is insane.

Deep.. true... and well written.. good work :)